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Pretty Alexandra never thought in her life how wonderful it would be to have sex with another girl, unless she met her new horny friend Suzie. She was a bit shy at fist but the moment she felt her friend’s tongue touching her sweet rosy pussy, the babe went all wet and gave rein to her passion. She loved it very much be fingered hard as well particularly in a doggystyle pose.

Two young and really cute girls got together to do nasty things to each other. In spite of their tender ages they are very experienced in girl on girl actions and nothing on earth can satisfy them so fully as their hot tongues along with playful fingers. The horny lesbians captured entirely by all that pussy-licking-fingering stuff being in expectation of sweet and lasting orgasms.

Я знаю английский на любительском уровне, тем не менее могу сказать что в обоих десках присутствуют ошибки, во втором меньше

С временами траблы.

укажите плиз на ошибки, если не трудно. одну нашел: во 2-м деске в последнем предл. пропущено were

..., until she met her new...
так же лучше используй PINK вместо rosy...
She loved being fingered hard as well, especially in a doggystyle position.

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